TechWhirl (TECHWR-L) is a resource for technical writing and technical communications professionals of all experience levels and in all industries to share their experiences and acquire information.
For two decades, technical communicators have turned to TechWhirl to ask and answer questions about the always-changing world of technical communications, such as tools, skills, career paths, methodologies, and emerging industries. The TechWhirl Archives and magazine, created for, by and about technical writers, offer a wealth of knowledge to everyone with an interest in any aspect of technical communications.
> -----Original Message-----
> From: @m [mailto:sdeichmann -at- voicemobility -dot- com]
> Sent: Thursday, February 24, 2000 2:01 PM
> To: TECHWR-L
> Subject: Wording without he/she
> One idea I had was to use:
>
> "The subscriber you have selected has dependent mailboxes and cannot be
> removed. Please remove these mailboxes before removing the subscriber."
>
> However I don't think this statement is as clear as the first one.
I personally think this revision is more clear than the original; in fact,
it was exactly what I would have suggested. You also might be able to get
away with "Please remove these mailboxes first" for the second sentence,
since the context makes it clear what mailboxes you are removing, and why.
Take care,
Scott
--
Scott A. McClare - Technical Writer
Neptec Design Group Ltd., Kanata, Ontario, Canada
(613) 599-7603 x504
smcclare -at- neptec -dot- com
