Re: Slightly OT but need advice on invented verbs (e.g., to gate)

["Richard G. Combs" <richard -dot- combs -at- voyanttech -dot- com>]

skwpt wrote:

<snip> For example, the
> following is the sentence that introduces a Visio
> diagram:
>
>     "The Create New User Profile dialog flow
>     illustrates the steps that create a new user
>     profile. This functionality is gated to
>     specific users based on role authorization."

I'm cringing more at "role authorization" than at "gated." That second
sentence sounds pretty stilted and bureaucratic. How about:

"You must have a valid [login | password | fingerprint | whatever] to create
user profiles."

Or:
 "Only [authorized users | managers | whatever] can create user profiles."

BTW, if you have any influence over the dialog box names, you might point
out that "Create New ..." is redundant -- unless this system has the amazing
ability to create *old* profiles. ;-)

Richard

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Richard G. Combs
Senior Technical Writer
Voyant Technologies, Inc.
richard -dot- combs -at- voyanttech -dot- com
303-223-5111
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