Re: I like mine better, but I don't know why.

Subject: Re: I like mine better, but I don't know why.
From: "Bonnie Granat" <bgranat -at- att -dot- net>
To: "TECHWR-L" <techwr-l -at- lists -dot- raycomm -dot- com>
Date: Thu, 17 Jan 2002 13:12:02 -0500


----- Original Message -----
From: "Jo Baer" <jbaer -at- tcfbank -dot- com>


> Hmm. I was thinking that the bullets referred to "benefits" rather than
"it" (the
> new process). In that vein, I would rewrite the bullets as
> - Improved adherence to corporate yada yadas
> - Increased sales ...
> - Improved margins ...
>


Yes, I agree with you. The bullets are a list of the benefits. One way of
naming a benefit is saying "Improved flexibility" or "Reliability". In any
case, the bulleted items, I think, should be noun phrases because we are
mentally saying, "The benefits are..."


Bonnie Granat
http://home.att.net/~bgranat/



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References:
RE: I like mine better, but I don't know why.: From: Nora Merhar
Re: I like mine better, but I don't know why.: From: Jo Baer

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