Wording problem! Arrrggh!

[Nancy Allison <maker -at- verizon -dot- net>]

   Such a dumb bothersome thing, but it's driving me nuts. I'm working on
   a marketing release note that lists changes and improvements in the
   newest software release. There's a bulleted list that includes items
   like

   -- Added Windows 7 support
   --Improved speed of plot display

   and quite a few entries that begin with

   --Fixed a problem where . . .

   as in

   --Fixed a problem where Print Preview caused an error when no printer
   was installed.

   A slight, although stodgy, improvement would be "Fixed a problem in
   which . . ." but I'm not sure the thing occurs IN a problem any more
   than it occurs WHERE the problem vaguely occurs. Problems are not
   locational -- at least, the problems we're describing do not occur in a
   specific location in real or virtual space.

   Each item in the list begins with an active verb, which you want in a
   document that's explaining all the good things you've done to improve
   the product. So Fixed is a desireable word in that way, but plenty of
   other verbs are equally attractive. I'd like to keep the pattern of
   starting each item with a strong active verb.

   I just can't think of how to do it!

   Do you perceive the original wording as enough of a problem for me to
   fuss over, or should I just move on to the other 9999 things I need to
   get done today?
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