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The first word of the third line is correct as written. Who is the nominative
case. If you think about the intent of the poem, you could also make the
construction, "...who sat down to think about it." as opposed to "...when sat
down to think about it."
david dubin -at- notes -dot- pw -dot- com
This has been one man's opinion, yours may vary with mileage.
>Here's one for all of you English "Experts". With the following poem:
>"On the beach of indecision
>lay the bleached bones of thousands
>Who with victory in sight
>Sat down to think about it"
>On the third line should the first word be Who or should it be When?