Re: Online help wording question

[Mona Albano <Mona_Albano -at- PROMIS -dot- COM>]

Anonymous said, about a touch-screen GUI:

"To select the program characteristics you want to view, touch the choice
you want to select in the View selection area."

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I don't think you need the abstract noun "choice"
when you are already selecting or maybe viewing.

How about,

     Touch the button beside the program characteristics
     that you want to view.

     To view program characteristics, look in the View area and
     touch the button for your choice

     To select program characteristics, in the View area
     touch one of the buttons.

BTW, I don't like the term, "radio button," because it seems
that we are trying to teach the reader our jargon before we
communicate anything useful.


-- Mona

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