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Subject:RE: Help: Beauty is what Beauty does From:Jim Shaeffer <jims -at- spsi -dot- com> To:"TECHWR-L" <techwr-l -at- lists -dot- raycomm -dot- com> Date:Fri, 14 Sep 2001 08:33:33 -0400
Try:
The benefit
or
The most important benefit
or
Option 1 delivers $1,000,000 in projected profit
Benefits and money are businesslike.
Of course, without context or audience, any wording we
propose is just wild speculation.
Jim Shaeffer (jims -at- spsi -dot- com)
> -----Original Message-----
>
> Could someone help me to rephrase the following sentence to
> something a little more businesslike:
>
> "The beauty of option 1 is XYZ."
>
A landmark hotel, one of America's most beautiful cities, and
three and a half days of immersion in the state of the art:
IPCC 01, Oct. 24-27 in Santa Fe. http://ieeepcs.org/2001/
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