RE: I like mine better, but I don't know why.

["Cadorette Johanne" <johanne -dot- cadorette -at- locusdialog -dot- com>]

Hmmm... it's that intro phrase that's the problem. It seems to me that
if you write "the following benefits," what should follow is a list of
actual benefits, such as "improved adherence to...". If you asked, what
is the benefit? you would answer, "improved adherence to corporate
discount policies."

My tow cents, hope it helps.

Johanne Cadorette
LocusDialog

-----Original Message----

I'm going back and forth with an analyst on something. I have the
following paragraph:

-------
This new process delivers the following benefits to the business:
- Improve adherence to corporate discount policies, increase sales
  efficiencies, improve margins, automate and expedite a 
  standardized Discount Approval process.
- Automate workflow of schedule of authorization table lookup to:
  - Confirm Level of authorization
  - etc.....
-------

She keeps adding an S at the end of many of the words, such as
Improves, increases, improves, expidites, Automates, Confirms, etc..

I think it reads better without the S and I'd like to offer a
gramatical rule to justify my position.

Therefore...am I right, wrong, or neither, and if right or wrong, is
there a rule under which this falls?



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