Re: Fog Index, take II

Subject: Re: Fog Index, take II
From: Bruce Byfield <bbyfield -at- axionet -dot- com>
To: "TECHWR-L" <techwr-l -at- lists -dot- raycomm -dot- com>
Date: Fri, 31 May 2002 10:00:15 -0300


Hart, Geoff wrote:

<<Don't use a long word when a short one will do.>>

A textbook case of oversimplifying. The correct statement is "Use the right
word for your audience."
Since this is a paraphrase from George Orwell, one of my personal literary heroes, I have to point out that you're not paying enough attention to the last two words: "will do." If the short word does not convey the meaning required, then it clearly won't do. The advice is not to use a short word in all circumstances, but to use a short word whenever possible.

<<Short sentences are easier to understand than long ones.>>

Another case of oversimplifying. The correct statement is "Use the right
sentence length; don't artificially shorten a sentence, nor allow a sentence
to grow so long it collapses under its own weight."

Even better: write to the sense, not the rhythm, of the sentence.

Many compound and complex sentences don't exist because they're necessary. They exist because people insert clauses because they think that something extra has to be added to make the sentence sound better. In speaking, this habit results in people using cliches to fill in the gaps. In writing, it often results in people giving too much information in one sentence.

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