RE: Sentense construction

["Lauren" <lt34 -at- csus -dot- edu>]

Hemang,

I don't like, and was taught to avoid, leading sentences that end in a
colon, unless the bullets complete the leading sentence.  In this case, I
would avoid the colon and lead the list with "The points from the meeting
follow."

I would also probably, depending on the context of the document, include
some identifier about the meeting in the sentence, whether it is a meeting
name or a date.

Additionally, both of the proposed sentences are acceptable, but sentence 2
does need the comma that Richard pointed out.  The differences between the
two sentences are that 1 is "active" voice and 2 is "passive" voice.  This
is important to know if someone should mention the voice in the document.

Lauren 

> -----Original Message-----
> From: techwr-l-bounces+lt34=csus -dot- edu -at- lists -dot- techwr-l -dot- com 
> [mailto:techwr-l-bounces+lt34=csus -dot- edu -at- lists -dot- techwr-l -dot- com] On 
> Behalf Of Combs, Richard
> Sent: Thursday, February 22, 2007 7:35 AM
> To: Hemang Antani; techwr-l -at- lists -dot- techwr-l -dot- com
> Subject: RE: Sentense construction
> 
> Hemang Antani wrote:
> 
> > Which of the following sentence construction would be suitable for 
> > American
> > readers:
> > 
> > (1) Listed below are the points discussed during the meeting.
> > 
> > (2) During the meeting we discussed points listed below.
> 
> "During the meeting, we discussed:" -- followed by the bullet list.
> 
> Discard unnecessary words. :-) 
> 
> Richard 
> 
> 
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