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On 22 Oct 2012, at 17:58, Chris Despopoulos <despopoulos_chriss -at- yahoo -dot- com> wrote:
> The simple example, "An alert is posted" says less than "The system posts an alert." To say as much in passive voice requires "An alert is posted by the system" That's almost a 30% increase in words.
>
You know I really, really wanted to let this drop(!), but maybe because its a Monday rather than a Friday…sorry, but the idea that your example carries more information in active than passive seems just bizarre, possibly because the tense is entirely inappropriate.
No further information is given by
"The system has posted an alert."
than
"An alert has been posted."
The fact that the 'system' posted the alert (as opposed to who?) is either irrelevant or understood in context. *Only if* the _agent_ of the posting is relevant to the user is active voice justified here.
And of course, if we're counting words, then the active voice is unnecessarily longer. However, possibly more important than arguing about the use of AP and PV is the belief that word count is directly proportional to clarity. You're kidding right?
1. Attach the gimmblewit to the jummblebit (6 words, totally clear, right?).
2. Attach the blue, diamond-shaped gimmblewit to the green, diamond-shaped jummblebit. (10 words, far more perspicuous).
Neither word count nor choice of active or passive voice make a jot of difference to clarity if they are not used appropriately in line with both the reader's expectations and the subject matter at hand.
Best
Phil http://applehelpwriter.wordpress.com
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