Re: Punctuation question

[Simon North <simonxml -at- gmail -dot- com>]

Sorry, I dislike all three for being stilted and verbose.

The information is displayed in five tabs, from left to right: Overview, Category, Locus, Sequence, and Details.

My ten cents.

Simon North



> On Jan 8, 2019, at 14:13, Slager Timothy J <Timothy -dot- Slager -at- dematic -dot- com> wrote:
> 
> 1 and 3 are grammatically correct, but have different styles. I tend to prefer 1, but have been accused of using too many commas. 2 is incorrect.
> 
> Not sure I agree with advice on active voice in this case, but if you had to I suppose you could say: Five tabs display the information: Overview, etc...
> 
> tims
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> Consider the following three sentences:
> 
> 
> 
> 1.    The information is displayed across five tabs, which, from left to
> right, are the following: Overview, Category, Locus, Sequence, and Details.
> 2.    The information is displayed across five tabs, which from left to
> right, are the following: Overview, Category, Locus, Sequence, and Details.
> 3.    The information is displayed across five tabs, which from left to
> right are the following: Overview, Category, Locus, Sequence, and Details.
> 
> 
> 
> Three different editors. Three different copy edits. I have my 'druthers,
> but I thought I would reach out to all the writers on this list and get a
> majority opinion. And yes, I am saying opinion, because I know that there is
> an absolute right and wrong, but I need to be neutral and non-judgmental
> when supplying my feedback and making the correction. Three egos are
> involved. . . . 
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> 
> TVB
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> Tammy Van Boening
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